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This was something I wrote in 2007 when my creative writing skills were poor but found it so I thought i'd share Smile

Vice City – New Management
Series 1
Part 1

Tommy is sitting behind his desk looking at paper. The papers show of how much money each of Tommy’s assets is making. He looks at boatyard, which is only generating $2000 a day. Tommy thinks for a moment before getting up from his desk. He leaves his office, walks down and stairs and goes outside. Outside the Vercetti Estate Tommy looks at his Limo, Infernus and Sabre Turbo, which is in the garage. Tommy hops in the Infernus and drives down to the boatyard. At the boatyard, Tommy gets out of his car and walks up to the boatyard-housing complex. He Sees that there are not enough boats to cope for all the people to use. Tommy gets on the phone to Ken Rosenberg.

“It’s Tommy!” says Tommy
“Nice to see you” says Ken Rosenberg
“Get me five new boats by tomorrow!” says Tommy

Tommy puts the phone down and drives back to his Estate. Tommy sits down at his desk and picks up the paper he was reading before. He changes the income of boatyard from $2000 to $6000 and laughs. Tommy picks up the weekly Vice City paper and reads the headline ‘Vercetti in Trouble?’ Tommy reads the article and discovers that Avery Carrington have formed a gang on his own and is attempting to take over Vice City. Tommy gets on the phone

“Ken, it’s Tommy!” says Tommy
“What can I do for you?” says Ken
“Get Phil Cassidy and Mitch Baker to my Estate ASAP!” shouts Tommy
“What about Avery Carrington?” says Ken
“The bastard wants to take over Vice City! Just get me Phil and Mitch!” shouts Tommy

Tommy hangs up the phone. Tommy gets up and goes for a walk around his mansion. He spots a local gang that are loyal to him. He tells them what is about to go down. They tell him they’ll get all 200 of them to the Estate tomorrow morning. Tommy decides on a ride in the sky, so he gets in his helicopter. Tommy wants to have a look at Avery’s building so he flies over. As he flies over, gunshots are heard so Tommy pulls out. Tommy flies back to the Estate knowing that Avery means business. Tommy goes down to his bar and downs a couple of beers before going back to his desk. Tommy decides that he needs more back up so he calls The Colonel, Juan Garcia Cortez.

“Colonel, it’s Tommy!” says Tommy
“Thank you again Tommy!” he says
“I need your help!”
“Anything for you!”
“Can you get to my Estate tomorrow?”
“I’m on my way back as we speak. I’ll be there!”

Tommy puts the phone down and decides he needs a good nights sleep.
Vice City – New Management
Series 1
Part 2

“POLICE OPEN UP!” shouts police officers.

Tommy is walking down the stairs when they break the door down. They ask Tommy if they can ask him a few questions and he agrees. One of the police officers calls for assistance to put a new door on. Tommy leads the two officers into his office.

“How may I help you?” says Tommy
“You were spotted at Avery’s building yesterday!” says one of the police officers
“I went for a helicopter ride around Vice City. I didn’t attack him. As a matter of fact, it was him who shot at me!” says Tommy, starting to get angry
“Calm Down Mr Vercetti!”
“I own Vice City and that bastard wants to take it away from me!”
“You mean, you two are having turf wars?”
“You could put it that way”
“If both of you don’t stop this, then I’ll have to arrest you both”

The police officers get up and drive off. Tommy watches them leaves. A coach then pulls up at Tommy’s Estate. Ken gets out first, followed by Phil and Mitch with his bikers and then the local gangs loyal to Tommy.

“Tonight we attack!” shouts Tommy

Tommy is shouting out orders when he notices that something is wrong. Tommy looks around and singles one of the gang members out.

“Kill the traitor!” shouts Tommy.

Everyone attacks with man and he is left covered in blood. Tommy tells them that he doesn’t want anyone to turn their back on him so if they don’t want in, they should leave. No one leaves so Tommy orders everyone to go down to Sunshine Autos where there will be cars waiting. Everyone jumps in the coach including Tommy and they head to Tommy’s car place. Tommy opens the garages showing Sabre Turbo’s, Infernus’s and Phoenix’s. Everyone gets in the cars and they head down to the dock area in Ocean Beach. They wait for Colonel. After 10 minutes he arrives. The Colonel drives off his boat in a Voodoo. They all head back to Tommy’s Estate. When they get back, they find fire engines putting out a fire. Tommy gets out of his car and finds a note of floor. He reads it out loud;


Tommy screws the paper up and decides that the time for revenge is now. Tommy gathers his troops and heads down to Avery building site. He remembers a mission Avery had him do blowing up building opposite. Tommy remembers location of the van and gets the remote from it. He sends the planes in carrying bombs. He plants three bombs and then tells the gangs to get ready to leave. Tommy sets a 10 second delay so everyone drives off. In the distance they see Avery’s building blow up. Everyone cheers as Tommy decides he needs a new place to organise his attacks. Tommy tells everyone to go home, but tells Phil to stay with him. Tommy & Mitch drive down to the print works. Tommy enters and gets $500,000. He gets back in the car he and Phil go to Phil’s place. They stay in Phil’s caravan. Tommy sleeps on the couch.
Vice City – New Management
Series 1
Part 3

The next day Tommy and Phil wake up to a gang pointing guns at them. They follow their instructions and get in their car. The gang takes them to Print Works where Avery Carrington is waiting outside. The gang let Tommy and Phil out of the car but keep the guns on them

“Tommy, I survive on businesses while you survive on money!” says Avery
“So what?” says Tommy
“You see Tommy, I found a loop-hole in this business”
“Tommy, Vice City’s Print Works in under new management!”
“You can’t do this you son of a bitch”
“Guys, show Tommy what happens to people who go against me!”

The gang shoot at Phil and he falls to the ground. Tommy goes over to Phil.

“Boomshine” says Phil before dying

Tommy gets up and stares a whole through Avery

“You see Tommy, soon enough every business will be mine!” says Avery
“Not if you destroy me they won’t”
“Tommy you forget, I have contacts, and I know all the loop-holes. It was just a matter of time before…”
“You son of a bitch!”
“Guys, since Mr Vercetti isn’t co-operating, take him to the docks and dump him in the sea!”

The gang force Tommy into the car as they drive down to the docks at Ocean Beach. As they drive down, a police car follows as the driver of the car puts their foot down, the police car puts on it’s siren. It’s a chase down to Ocean Beach. The police follow the gang to Ocean Beach and they see them with Tommy. The police hold up their guns

“Put down your weapons!” shouts the police officer. The gang drop all of their weapons. The police officers walk over

“You are under arrest. Anything you do say, may be given in evidence and may be used against you in a court of law!”

Tommy is also arrested and taken to Vice City police station. Tommy knows that Avery will be laughing at him and he starts to get worked up. The police guide the gang and Tommy to a cell. Tommy asks for a phone call and the police allow him to make one phone call

“Ken, it’s Tommy!” says Tommy
“Where are you?” asks Ken
“I’m in jail. Avery stitched me up and killed Phil”
“When Phil died he said Boomshine. It’s at Phil’s place. You know what to do!”

Tommy puts the phone down and goes back to his cell where he gets ready to sleep for the night
Vice City – New Management
Series 1
Part 4

The next day Ken comes down and pays the bail money for Tommy. Tommy and Ken go back to Tommy’s Estate where everyone is waiting. Tommy tells them to chill for a while and get a drink. Tommy goes to his office and sits down. He thinks about what has happened in Vice City since he first came. He remembers being screwed, making and losing friends such as Lance Vance and Diaz. He remembers that he owns Vice City and controls what goes on. Tommy gets up from his desk and gets tells Mitch and his biker gang to go Phil’s place and grab a tank of boomshine. The bikers leave. Tommy sends everyone else to boatyard and tells them to wait there. Tommy’s phone rings

“Tommy I’m Sorry!” says an elderly voice
“What?” Tommy asks
“About Avery taking over Print Works”
“That’s not your fault”
“I can tell you who they’re working for”
“Remember Sonny has you do a job for him by saving his cousin’s ass from going to jail. Well since he found out, you killed him, he has been using his big bank balance to buy people on his side. Tommy be careful!”
“I always am!”

Tommy remembers Giorgio, who was on trial and he persuaded jury to change their verdict. Tommy wishes he hadn’t done the job now but realises that Giorgio will be a threat. Tommy drives down to the boatyard where everyone else is waiting. Tommy fills them all in and they get prepare themselves

“If it comes to it, we may have to travel to Liberty City!” shouts Tommy.

Everyone is ready. Tommy decides that enough is enough and the Forelli’s need to taught a lesson in death. Tommy phone rings

“It’s me again Tommy, Giorgio is arriving at Vice City in about an hour”

Tommy orders everyone to drive to Escobar airport. Everyone has his or her weapons at the ready. The plane arrives and everyone gets off. They point waiting but no Forelli.


“You can’t defeated me one-on-one Tommy Vercetti!” says a man with a deep voice
“I can try Forelli!” shouts Tommy
“All your men are dead. It’s just you and me. Tommy you can die like these bastards or you can survive and be my bitch!”
“I’m not dying!”
“Then you’re my bitch!”
“I can’t believe Vice City is out of my control by a death threat”
“Believe it! Come on, we need to get back to Forelli Mansion. You can start by driving me there”

Tommy drives Giorgio back to Forelli Mansion!

Series 2 is currently being worked on. This is the end of series 1!
Vice City – New Management
Series 2
Part 1

“Here’s your tea…sir” says Tommy
“Good, you remembered!” says Giorgio

Tommy leaves the room that used to be his office. Tommy decides to try and make a break for it so he runs up the stairs towards the helicopter. He stops at the last corner and peers out and sees two security guards guarding the helicopter. Tommy decides not to chance dying so Tommy makes his way to Giorgio’s office and asks him if he has any work for him. He tells Tommy of an old turf war in Vice City that is Legendary, Haitians and Cubans. Giorgio tells Tommy that if he fails re-starting the war, Tommy will die. Tommy leaves the office and heads down the stairs and into the awaiting Washington provided by Giorgio. Tommy mutters to himself about having to drive a piece of crap. Tommy decides to take a detour first and heads to Phil’s place. Once there he noticed Giorgio’s henchmen collecting goods. He also notices Mitch and his bikers tied up. Tommy gets on the phone

“It’s me Tommy!” says Tommy
“What’s up Tommy?” says Ken
“Ken there are only me and you, plus bikers left. I need you to get Steve Scott to get Mercedes and Candy Suxx out of town!”
“Ok Tommy!”

Tommy gets in his Washington. Tommy drives into his taxi firm over the road and gets into his zebra taxi. He runs over the gangs shooting at him as he drives away. Tommy drives to his film studio. Inside he sees Steve Scott talking to Mercedes and Candy Suxx

“Girls, get out of town!” says Tommy
“Why?” says Candy Suxx
“The Studio may come under attack. You could go to Mercedes home as it’s in neutral territory”
“Ok Tommy!”

The girls hop into a limo and drive off. Tommy takes a look around his studio before talking to Steve Scott. He tells Steve to announce something horrible has happened to film studio and that it is up for sale. Steve doesn’t understand why but agrees with his boss. Tommy drives back to Phil’s place where he sees Giorgio’s henchmen have gone. Tommy goes up to Mitch and bikers and frees them. Mitch tells Tommy to be careful. Tommy tells Mitch he is always careful and is going to take back Vice City! Tommy’s phone rings.

“Vercetti!” says Tommy
“It’s Ken. I need a favour” says Ken, “I’m a bit down tonight, could you send Candy Suxx over?”
“Ken, get off your ass. This isn’t time for fun. Go to my apartment in Ocean Beach. You’ll find a large amount of money. Go to Ammu-nation and buy all their stock.”
“You taking over Vice City?”
“I’m going to start by taking over biggest business in Vice City, Ammu-nation.”

Tommy puts the phone down as Mitch and his bikers drive back to their biker-meeting place. Tommy gets back into his taxi and thinks he needs more money. Tommy thinks about joining VCPD to get Giorgio arrests and sent down, but then realises he still has henchmen. Tommy sees the henchman driving in his rear-view mirror. He follows and they drive towards sunshine autos. Tommy gets side-by-side and opens fire blowing the drivers head off. The car veers into the side of Tommy’s auto shop and blows up. Tommy drives off before he gets involved with police. Tommy drives to Cuban territory and starts a fight and gets them to follow him. He runs into Haitian territory and starts a fight there. As the two sides meet they open fire on each other. Tommy escapes winded but manages to get back in his taxi. Tommy drives back to taxi place and pick up his Washington. Tommy drives back to mansion knowing the job has been complete.

“Well done Tommy!” shouts Giorgio from the door of the mansion
“No problem…Boss!” says Tommy
“Tommy, you look tired” laughs Giorgio, “Here’s a dollar!”
“Yes, know where on my henchmen?”
“On my way to Cuban territory, I saw them crash into sunshine autos. It looked like someone shot them”
“What did car look like?”
“It was from a stretch limo like Avery Carrington has”

Tommy laughs to himself knowing that a war should lead to Giorgio having no power. Giorgio gets in the awaiting infernos and heads down to Avery Carrington’s building yard! He sees Avery’s limo with a red blotch on the side. Giorgio walks over to Avery and pushes him. Avery pushes him back. They both draw out their Uzi 9mm but Avery gets the first shot in as Giorgio falls to the ground bleeding from the head. Avery opens fire and kills Giorgio. Avery puts Giorgio’s body in the trunk of his Phoenix and drives off and dumps his body in the sea.
Vice City – New Management
Series 2
Part 2

Tommy picks up the paper and reads headline, ‘Giorgio Forelli Dead In River’. Tommy decides that now he can take over Vice City, but wonders who killed him. Tommy goes to the safe and takes out his weapons. He walks around the mansion taking over Giorgio’s henchmen. Tommy kills all twenty of them and reclaims the mansion as Vercetti Estate. Tommy sits at his desk and picks up the phone

“Steve, it’s Tommy!”
“I’ve had interest in Film Studio” says Steve
“Don’t sell it! I’m in charge of Vice City!”
“Good work Tommy!”
“Steve get Mercedes and Candy Suxx back and make the biggest and best film you have ever made”
“Ok Tommy!”
Tommy similes as Ken Rosenberg enters.. They shake hands. Ken gives Tommy the keys to Ammu-nation and tells him that he owns every Ammu-nation store in Vice City. Tommy smiles once more as Ken leaves. Tommy gets on the phone to organise more business.

“Who’s this?” asks Avery Carrington
“Your worst nightmare!” shouts Tommy
“Tommy Vercetti!”
“You damn right! Avery I own 99% of Vice City. We could have had a great partnership but you turned on me after the jobs I done for you!”
“Your point being?”
“After I own what’s left of Avery buildings that I will have full control of Vice City. Not even police can stop me!”
“You’ll end up like Giorgio!”

Avery puts the phone down on Tommy. Tommy realises that Avery must have killed Giorgio. Tommy goes back to his mansion and sits at his desk. He thinks about how Giorgio and his henchmen killed all of his friends namely Colonel and Phil. Tommy decides that Forelli family must pay. Tommy decides he will fly to Liberty City where Forelli family have currently moved. Tommy packs his bags. He phones Ken and tells him to meet him at airport. Two hours later, Tommy & Ken board a plan for Liberty City
Vice City – New Management
Series 2
Part 3 (Liberty City)

The plan lands at Francis International Airport. Tommy & Ken get off the plan. Ken tells Tommy that Forelli’s are staying in Portland, which is the other side of Liberty City. Ken gets out his map as he and Tommy look for somewhere to stay. Tommy notices Phil Cassidy has a place in Staunton Island and decide to head over there. Tommy stops a car in middle of the street and points a gun at him. The man runs away as Tommy & Ken get in. Tommy is running low on Ammunition so he drives to Ammu-Nation. At Ammu-Nation, Tommy notices a sign on the window, ‘PROPERTY OF SONNY FORELLI’. Tommy hits the window as it smashes. Tommy enters the store and puts the man at gun-point

“Where does Forelli live?” Asks Tommy in his aggressive voice
“I don’t know” says a nervous assistant who in still being pointed at by Tommy’s gun, “Sonny came up last week and bought the shop”
“Sonny’s dead!”
“He was here last week!”
“What did he look like?”
“He was a fat man with the word ‘Diablos’ tattooed on his chest”

Tommy turns his attention to Ken. He pulls the gun away from shop assistance who presses panic alarm. Tommy shoots the assistant and grabs the ammo he needs. Tommy & ken get back in their car and drive off.

“Are the Diablos working for Forelli family?” asks Tommy to Ken
“Why would they use Sonny’s name?” Ken asks
“Why would they want Liberty City Ammu-Nation?” asks Tommy

Tommy & Ken have so many un-answered questions that they want answered. Tommy drives Ken and himself to Phil Cassidy’s Army Surplus. Tommy parks the car in garage and enters the place.

“Who’s that?” asks a voice from darkness. Tommy switches on a light.
“Kent Paul!” Tommy exclaims.

They shake hands as Kent Paul fills Tommy & Ken in on what’s been happening at Liberty City. Kent Paul reveals how Diablos were paid to keep Sonny Forelli name alive in Liberty City while he dealt with business in Vice City. Kent Paul tells Tommy that he has some friends across Liberty City that he can call. Tommy & Ken decide to have a look around Staunton Island. They drive back to Ammu-Nation to see if they can find any clues. When they get their they find someone has set fire to Ammu-Nation. The police tell Tommy and Ken that there were two people inside, believe to be crime bosses in Liberty City. Tommy and Ken look at each other before getting in their car and driving back to Phil’s place.

“Kent, Who are the Liberty City gang?” asks Tommy
“They all own a section of Liberty City! Each gang is tougher than the last and they all have a range of contacts,” answers Kent Paul
“Ammu-Nation was burnt down and police say two bodies were found” says Ken

Tommy looks in his pockets and pulls out $200,000. Tommy tells Ken & Kent Paul that Ammu-Nation will be rebuilt and that Liberty City will be Vercetti Turf! Kent Paul asks Tommy why Ammu-Nation. Tommy tells him that it’s Liberty City’s leading weapons supplier. Tommy & Ken get in the car and head down to Liberty City Planning Department. Kent Paul’s phone rings

“Kent, we just bought the Mars Café and Hyman Memorial Stadim” laughs one of the LoveFist band members
“Kent Paul is taking over Vice City! I’ll keep them here as long as I can”

Kent Paul puts the phone down and starts laughing. Tommy & Ken walk in as Kent is surprised to see them

“Kent you twisted bastard!” shouts Tommy
“What?” says Kent Paul
“We stood outside knowing you had something planned”

Tommy and Ken kick the shit out of Kent Paul. Tommy pulls out a UZI 9mm and fires as Kent Paul who is dead and lying in a pool of his own blood. Tommy & Ken get their stuff and head down to airport to travel to Vice City.

“What about Forelli’s?” Ken asks Tommy
“Leave them for now. I’ll beat them if they come to Vice City!”

Ken & Tommy board the plane and fly back to Vice City. When they arrive at Escobar Airport, they see former army solders sitting as kerb with no guns and no machine. Then Tommy sees Mitch and his bikers in a tank firing as various things.

“MITCH I’LL GET YOU FOR THIS!” shouts Tommy!


And that's all I wrote!
Good concept, won't bash you for putting forth the effort, but it was kind of hard to read as you seemed pretty dry and mixed tenses. I'm not an English teacher or major or anything, but like I said it was kind of hard to read. I don't want to constructively critique you, as you didn't ask for that so I'll just leave this opinion as is. Not too bad though I really liked the concept and plot.
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Indeed, maybe try posting something with new and improved writing skills? Wink

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